This is an excellent piece of writing! Your storytelling is improving a lot, and you did a great job of describing the pop quiz situation. I particularly liked your use of strong vocabulary like "disaster," "immediately," and "huge relief." Your sentences are well-structured, and the story has a very clear beginning, middle, and end with a meaningful lesson at the conclusion. Your ability to express emotions, like "dying of stress," makes the story very engaging for the reader. Here are a few small things you can fix to make it even better: Spelling - startt: This is a minor typo. It should be spelled started. Grammar - Tense consistency: In the sentence "because I use my phone for everything," since the whole story is in the past, it would be better to say "because I used my phone for everything." - Articles: In the phrase "talk with people," it is grammatically fine, but "talk to people" is a bit more common in this context. Punctuation and Formatting - Quotation marks: You used the French-style angle quotes (« ») at the very beginning and end. In English, we usually use double quotation marks (" ") for the whole story if it's a quote, or simply no marks at all if it is just an essay. - Commas: You have a great handle on commas! Just a small reminder to ensure there is always a space after a comma, such as in "Everything was fine, and..." (which you mostly did correctly!). Honestly, your writing is so much better this time and I'm very proud of you! Fantastic work!

Reihaneh jan, your writing shows a lot of emotion and a very clear personal journey! I really enjoyed how you described your transition from feeling nervous and sweating to finding new friends and gaining confidence. You tried your best to use appropriate language, using phrases like "At the beginning," "gradually," and "In the end" to move the story forward. Your use of the idiom "give it a go" is also excellent and shows you are comfortable using natural English expressions! Here are some points to help you improve your writing: Spelling and Word Choice - problemin: This looks like a small typo where "problem" and "in" were joined together. It should be "I had a problem." - invention: Based on the story, I think you meant invitation. An invention is something like a new lightbulb or telephone, while an invitation is when you ask people to come to your home. - like sticks: This is an interesting comparison! If you mean the person is not very friendly or is very quiet, you might say they are stiff or cold. In English we normally don't say like sticks. Grammar - love to communicating: After the word love, you should use either the ing form or to + base verb. So, you can say "love communicating" or "love to communicate." - The problems is: Since you are talking about one specific issue, you should use the singular form: "The problem is." - dream about they don't want: A more natural way to say this is "I often dream that they don't want to talk to me." - someone come: When you use someone, the verb needs an s at the end. It should be "When someone comes to talk to me." - afraid to communicating: Just like the first point, this should be "afraid to communicate" or "afraid of communicating." Punctuation and Capitalization - Capital letters: Remember that we only use capital letters at the start of a sentence or for proper names. You wrote "but When" and "Now I'm," where the words when and now don't need to be capitalized if they aren't starting the sentence. - Semicolons: You used a semicolon after gradually. Usually, a comma is enough there: "but gradually, I started to talk with them." Your ability to express complex feelings like social anxiety in a second language is very impressive. With a little improvement in your grammar use and word choices your writing will be even better.

Sana jan, you’ve written a very clear and relatable story! Your ability to describe a specific memory and how you overcame a fear is excellent. I like how you used a variety of words like "supposed to" and "elementary school" to set the scene. The ending of your story is very positive and really shows your emotions. It’s a very engaging piece of writing. Here are a few areas you can work on to improve: Spelling - amusment: This should be spelled amusement. - didi: This is a small typo; it should be did. - elewators and elewator: In English, we use a v for this word, so it should be elevators or elevator. - thet: This should be spelled that. Punctuation and Spacing - Spaces after punctuation: You often forget to put a space after a comma or a period. For example, instead of "school,I", it should be "school, I". Instead of "stopped.I", it should be "stopped. I". Putting a space makes your writing much easier to read. - Capitalization: Remember to start every new sentence with a capital letter. For example, after the comma in "she told me ,you go first," the next sentence "she did not come in" should start with a capital S: "She did not come in." Grammar - Compound words: droptower is usually written as two separate words: drop tower. - Singular and Plural: In the last sentence, you wrote "afraid of elewator." Since you mean elevators in general, it should be plural: "I wasn’t afraid of elevators anymore." - Sentence Structure: You started a sentence with "because I was so young." While we often speak this way, in writing it is better to connect it to the main thought: "Because I was so young, I got really scared." Keep practicing! You are doing a great job of expressing your thoughts clearly and your writing is improving every single time, I'm very proud of all your improvements!

This is a lovely piece of writing Ghazal! You have a very clear way of telling a story, and your use of idioms like "give it a go" is impressive. You did a great job of conveying your emotions, I could really feel your heartbeat and the tension as you got on that train. Well done! Here are a few areas you can look at to make your writing even better: Spelling - understoond: This should be spelled understood (with only one 'o'). - mustn't: You spelled this correctly, but remember that in English, we usually use "shouldn't" for a personal realization or "decided not to" for a future choice. Grammar and Prepositions - scared from: In English, we always say scared of. So, it should be "I'm really scared of most of them." - nervous (as a noun): You wrote "shivered with nervous." Here, you need the noun form, which is nervousness. So: "I shivered with nervousness." - hear + verb: You wrote "I heard my mom told me." After the verb "hear," we use the base form of the next verb. It should be: "I heard my mom tell me." - double words: You have a small typo where you wrote "decided to to give it a go." Just one "to" is enough! Punctuation and Flow - articles: In the phrase "most of interesting activities," you need the word "the." It should be: "most of the interesting activities." - run-on sentences: In the first paragraph, you have several ideas joined by commas. Try using a full stop (period) to separate them. For example: "...doing new activities. I don't like to..." - spacing: Remember to always put a space after a full stop before starting the next sentence (e.g., "...on it. When it started..."). It was a good piece in general, well done and keep up the great work.

This is a great story Laaya jan! You’ve done a wonderful job setting the scene and building suspense. Your use of descriptive phrases like "crept in the pit of my stomach" and "a huge wave of nausea hit me" is excellent, it really helps the reader feel the physical sensation of your fear. You also used some sophisticated structures, like "ropes were suspended from the ceiling," which shows a very high level of English! Here are some small points to help you improve: Grammar - Suggest + Verb: You wrote "suggested to go." In English, after the word suggest, we usually use an -ing verb. So, it should be: "suggested **going** to Roshano." - Allow + to: In the sentence "allowing children hang," you need the word "to" after allowing. It should be: "**allowing children to hang** and swing." - Irregular Past Tense: You used "creeped." While people sometimes use this, the standard irregular past tense for creep is **crept**. So: "a strange bad feeling **crept** in the pit of my stomach." Punctuation and Flow - Sentence Length: Your second sentence ("But the last time that my friend...") is quite long because of the extra information in the middle. You could break it into two sentences to make it easier to read. - Punctuation: Just a small note to check the space before your comma in "ceiling ," usually, the comma should touch the word before it. Laaya jan, as always you did such a great job! Well done!

This story is absolutely delightful! Your writing style is very funny you're improving a lot! I loved the detail about your mom dropping her cup because you screamed so loudly. You’ve done a wonderful job using descriptive language to set the scene, like "crawling near the elevator lights" and "shaking like crazy." It’s also great to see you using metaphors like "winning a tiny war", this makes your writing feel very creative and personal. Here are a few small points to help you polish your English even more: Grammar - Plurals and Articles: You wrote "never wanted to dream about cockroach!" Since you are talking about them in general, it should be plural: "dream about *cockroaches." - Parallelism: In your first paragraph, you say "I feed stray cats... watch bird videos, and even dream about having a cute rabbit." To make it flow perfectly with the other verbs, you could say "dreaming about" to match "having." - Make + Base Form: Just like in some other common mistakes, "has made me braver" is correct (adjective), but if you use a verb, remember it stays in the base form (e.g., "made me feel brave"). Punctuation - Quotation Marks: You used a mix of straight and curly apostrophes (don' t, They' re). Try to keep the space between the letter and the apostrophe closed, like this: don't and They're. This was a joy to read. Turning a fear of cockroaches into a "tiny war" story is a brilliant idea. Excellent work!

This is a fantastic blog post! Your structure is very professional, and using a heading to organize your thoughts makes it very easy for the reader to follow your journey. You’ve used some excellent descriptive phrases like "terrified of making mistakes," "freeze on stage," and "my heart was racing," which really help the reader imagine how you felt. Your use of the past perfect tense ("I had always wanted") is also a very advanced touch for a B1 student. Great job! Here are some small suggestions to help you refine this piece: Grammar and Punctuation - Repetition: In the last sentence, you used "really" twice ("really hard" earlier and "really enjoyed"). To sound more advanced, you could replace one of them. For example: "I thoroughly enjoyed the experience." - Sentence Structure: Your sentences are grammatically correct, but you could try using a "so... that" structure to add more emphasis. For example: "I was so terrified of making mistakes that I thought everyone would laugh at me." Vocabulary and Expression - You mentioned your heart racing. You could add another physical detail from your list, like "my palms were sweating," to make the description even stronger. Spelling - Practice/Practicing: You used the American spelling with a "c" and "s." This is perfectly fine! Just remember that in British English, the verb is spelled with an "s" (practising). Both are correct, just stay consistent with whichever one you choose. General Writing Tip - You did a great job describing the process of practicing. To make the ending even more powerful, you could add one sentence about what your classmates actually did; did they clap? Did they smile? This would provide a nice contrast to your fear that they would "laugh with you." You have a very clear and engaging writing style. Facing a fear of public speaking is a huge accomplishment, and you described it beautifully!

Yas, This is a very well-organized blog post! You have a clear introduction, a middle section that explains your feelings, and a conclusion where you share what you learned from the experience. Your writing is very easy to follow, and you used transition words like "At first" and "However" to show how your situation changed over time. Here are a few suggestions to help you improve: Grammar and Structure - Article use: You wrote "I started learning Spanish little by little." While this is correct, when talking about the process, you could say "I started learning the Spanish language" or simply keep it as you have it for a natural feel. - Missing articles: In the sentence "One of the biggest challenges in my life was when I moved to Spain," adding "the" before "biggest challenges" was a great move! You can also try: "Moving to another country is never an easy task." Vocabulary and Expression - Simple Sentences: You have many short sentences (e.g., "The language was different, and I didn't know many people."). To make your writing more advanced, try to combine them using "because" or "which." For example: "The language was different, which made it difficult to meet many people at first." Punctuation and Flow - Paragraph Breaks: Your paragraphing is good, but you could add a little more detail about one specific "simple thing" that was difficult. For example, describing a specific moment at the supermarket or in a park would make the blog post feel even more real to the reader. General Writing Tip - You have a very clear and honest style. To improve, try to use a few more "feeling" adjectives. Instead of "I felt proud," you could say "I felt incredibly proud" or "a huge sense of pride." You stayed on topic and expressed a complex life event very clearly. Great job on not giving up in such a tough situation!

Farzaneh jan, as always, this is an excellent piece of writing! Your ability to describe internal emotions and physical sensations, like your ears burning or your palms sweating, is very impressive for a B1 learner. The story has a clear narrative and is very well written which makes it engaging to read. I especially loved your use of phrases like "give it a go" and "deep breath of relief", they make your English sound very natural and expressive. Here are a few small things you can work on to make your writing even better: Spelling - firm: You wrote "firm a theatre team," but you likely meant form (to create). - ti: In "struggling to not ti shiver," this looks like a small typo for to. Grammar - Parallelism: In your first sentence, to match the other verbs, it should be "I normally love acting, putting myself... and feeling their feelings." - Make + Base Form: You wrote "has made me realised," but after the word "made," we use the basic verb. So, it should be made me realise. - Comparisons: Instead of saying "not that complicated that we think," it is more accurate to say not as complicated as we think they are. Vocabulary and Word Choice - Acting test: In theatre, this is usually called an audition. - Earn a score: In a school context, we usually say get a grade or earn credit. General Writing Tip - You started a few sentences with "And" or "But." This is okay in stories, but to sound even more advanced, you could try words like However, Eventually, or Surprisingly. You should be very proud of this personal challenge story! You really brought your experience to life. Keep up the great work!